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for pointing out several errors in panel 5.
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-If I'm not mistaken it looks like you used vectors (like i said I could be wrong) and to great effect. You able to piece the seen while still having it look natural and fluid.
-The dialogue was appropriately done and I felt like it did each character justice. You effectively showed the hidden softness of Rainbow Dash.
-How ever, Twilight Sparkle's reaction to the situation did seem all that in sync with her character that we've have seen from the show. From what I've gathered she'd be more likely to go out there and try to find Rainbow as soon as possible so she could attempt to sweep the mess under the rug like she did in Lesson Zero. Grant it that this a fan comic and nothing by any means has to be spot on in accordance to the show.
-In the second to last frame, Applebloom and Sweetie Belle looking up doesn't feel like the appropriate facial expression for that situation. A slightly reduced eye size would have given a better feel.
Loved the comic in it's entirety, especially the last panel. Epic way to end that part.
Vision: There were some great pictures in this set of comics, and they resembled the characters, in a way. Problem: some vectors and scenes were used more than once or looked too much like the previous panels', which made the comic seem as if it wasn't progressing much. Also, in the third to last panel, the scene change felt slightly rushed from picture to picture.
Originality: I have read quite a few comics, but this definetly is original. The concept of the each individual parts are in character like they should be, and I could definetly see where Scootaloo/Dash would love a walking, talking version of their idols. Problem: It seemed a little too canon....
Technique: I got nothing to say here, except that you did an excellent job of portraying the characters, with dialogue and facial expressions, and pictures. Thank god for vectors. Problem: As I said before, keep an eye out for panels that look too much alike. Readers don't want to view a flipnote if it's stationary.
Impact: DAYUM! This was genius, and the ending made me LAWL quite a bit. With that being said, SOMEPONY ANIMATE THIS! The mini-punchlines were also quite humorous, and didn't make me go: "Fuck it. I'm out." Problem: None.
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